Writing your peer reviews After you have posted your introductory and concluding
Writing your peer reviews After you have posted your introductory and concluding paragraphs, you will then respond to two of your peers with 3-4 sentences for each peer. In your messages, please include helpful concrete suggestions, empathetic support, and thoughtful insight into what they have written. How can they improve and strengthen their paragraphs? NOTE**** NO WORK CITED REQUIRED IN YOU REVIEW Below are the two papers to be peer reviewed. PAPER 1: Introduction and Conclusion Board Introduction: After the 2021 United States Capitol Attack resulted in the deaths of at least four people, a future for democracy seemed bleak. However, in her inaugural poem, “The Hill We Climb”, Amanda Gorman reaches the hearts of America and empowers the country to move towards a brighter future. She stresses the importance of America acknowledging and coming to terms with its dark past in order to move forward so that the country may reunite and heal as a whole. After establishing her credibility, Gorman effectively illustrates a convincing argument through her usage of rhetorical strategies and by appealing to logic and emotions. Conclusion: Her intended audience is the entirety of America, a growing country of immigrants, whom she successfully unites in her poem by connecting to them on an emotional level. Although equality and unification may only seem to concern communities of color, this matter should concern any American who lives within the country’s borders. As diversity increases and different cultures blend, people of color will, in due time, no longer be the minority, making their voices larger and louder. This eventuality makes it crucial for people of color to have a voice that is heard and valued equally, which is the core principle of democracy from the beginning. Overall, Gorman displays a convincing and well-written argument. Works Cited Hermann, Peter, and Steve Thompson. “D.C. Medical Examiner Releases Cause of Death for Four People Who Died during Capitol Riot.” The Washington Post, 7 Apr. 2021, https://www.washingtonpost.com/local/public-safety/trump-riot-death-medical-exainer/2021/04/07/53806608-97cf-11eb-a6d0-13d207aadb78_story.html. Accessed 25 Apr. 2022. Foussianes, Chloe. “Amanda Gorman’s Poem Stole the Show at the Inauguration. Read It Again Here.” Town & Country, 21 Jan. 2021, https://www.townandcountrymag.com/society/politics/a35279603/amanda-gorman-inauguration-poem-the-hill-we-climb-transcript/. Accessed 22 Apr. 2022. Tsakiridis, George. “Vine and Fig Tree.” George Washington’s Mount Vernon, https://www.mountvernon.org/library/digitalhistory/digital-encyclopedia/article/vine-and-fig-tree/. Accessed 22 Apr. 2022. PAPER 2: Introduction and Conclusion Board Introduction: Throughout U.S. history, over the past 20 years, there has been an alarming number of mass shootings, and in 2018 the Parkland shooting was the spark that started the need for change. Uniquely, this is where X comes into play with their speech "We Call B.S," where they help the audience understand and realize that they need to do everything in their power to stop mass shootings and enforce stricter gun laws. X explicitly emphasizes that the Parkland shooting will be the last mass shooting. They want this because they don't want the victims to become another statistic or another number on a piece of paper. To emphasize their goal in mind and get the audience to listen, they use Ethos, Pathos, and Logos which illustrate a convincing argument for change. Ultimately, X's use of establishing her credibility and then using emotion and credibility ties everything together and makes a great speech. Conclusion: In essence, X uses rhetorical strategies along with Pathos, Logos, and Ethos to connect with the audience from an emotional and logical standpoint. For example, many people believe that they cannot be mass shooting victims, which is probably what many victims of mass shootings think as well but were sadly mistaken. Hence, people should care about this because it has to do with everyone's well-being and safety. The overall goal of this is to protect people from being victims. In general, X pushes for stricter gun laws and regulations so that people can go to the movies, malls, restaurants, and schools without the fear of someone coming out of the woodwork with an automatic rifle. Given these points, X's speech provides a well-thought argument for stricter gun laws that can provide universal safety for American citizens. Wilson, Tony. “Emma Gonzalez: 'We Call Bs!, Student Rally Post Parkland Mass Shooting - 20188.” Speakola, Speakola, 18 Feb. 2018, https://speakola.com/ideas/emma-gonzalez-parkland-massacre-florida-2018 (Links to an external site.).

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